This was a really stunning piece--it's difficult to use the second person effectively, to embed the reader in a character's thought processes, but you've done a particularly good job here. Your Henry is both wonderfully complex and elegantly simple, full of competing sentiments that he simply can't articulate with the intricacy that he requires. The test, I think, is whether you can get your reader to love Richard and hold him in contempt at once; whether you can make the reader frustrated at his caprice and lustful at his touch and at the same time grieved by his death.
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Date: 2009-08-18 04:12 pm (UTC)And as far as I'm concerned, you succeeded.